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Private schools are the best option for studying. Do you agree?

#schools #option
Education is an essential part of our lives. Some people believe that studying in private
schools
 is the best opportunity for receiving quality learning. In my opinion, attending a fee-paying
school
 is the best option for studying if you can afford it.
To begin
 with, these types of
schools
 are independent of the government. They are funded by parents. There are few students in one class and due to that teachers can pay personal attention to every single child.
As a result
, students are more motivated and confident in doing their tasks.
In addition
, paid institutions provide access to advanced technology. Libraries, computer labs and classrooms are well designed and equipped with modern facilities.
For example
, students could rest after their lessons at some special places at
school
. In
this
 way, teenagers are more interested in
school
, not only in studying but
also
 in resting.
On the other hand
, taxes for attending private
school
 are extremely expensive. A lot of parents should save all their salaries for their children to attend it.
As a result
, they quit it after one or two years. All in all studying in private
schools
 is expensive but it
also
 has a lot of advantages. I strongly believe that these types of
schools
 are the best choice if you want to receive education and knowledge.
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