Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some
peolple
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people
believe that
advertisments
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advertisements
play a crucial role in persuading
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to purchase things. Whereas , others claim that nowadays
advertisments
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advertisements
are too common and
people
are hardly interested in them. In my
opinion
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promotion plays a vital role in alluring
people
to buy products. Nowadays, there has been a gradual rise in advertisements as compared to previous years.
Therefore
, some
people
believe that commercials are very common these days and
public
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hardly
pays
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attention to them .
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could be due to the reason
because
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in
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this
highly competitive world,
people
are extremely busy
in
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their own work.
For instance
,
large
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a large
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number of soft and energy drinks are launched by various companies on regular basis.
Therefore
, repeated
promotion's
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promotions
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of these products leads to boredom and declining
interests
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interest
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of the
buyers
.
On the other
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many
people
agree that media is the best source for
promotion
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the promotion
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of products for the seller. Multinational companies are spending a huge amount of money specifically
for
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the
adverstisements
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advertisements
advertisement
in order to attract more
buyers
. Various famous personalities
such
as actors,
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and sports
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sports person
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sportsperson
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are being hired for the publicity of the product.
For instance
, these days online shopping is a major trend and recent data has shown that there has been a substantial increase in the
buyers
now as compared to past years and
reason
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behind
this
is marketing strategies and advertisements. So, I completely agree that publicity and promotions are highly influential in attracting
buyers
. To conclude, undoubtedly media has
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influence on
people
of different ages from children to teenagers, adults or old age
people
. In my opinion, I strongly believe commercials do persuade and attract
people
to purchase things no matter how common they are.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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