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schools should force children to learn a foreign language. To what extend do you agree or disagree.

These days
people
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 are keen on learning more than one
language
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. At ,schools kids are learning
minimum
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 of three
languages
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. In my ,opinion it's good to know native
languages
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 it helps them to communicate with
any
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many
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people
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 across the world. 
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, the one should remember that while we give ample time to learn
the
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 foreign
language
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 they should make an effort to learn their own
language
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,
for
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instance
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 while you talk different
language
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 with your friends and colleagues. we should always talk
in
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 our own mother tough with family it helps the transfer
not
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 just the
language
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 but
also
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 the culture we pass it to the upcoming generations.It's
also
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indviduals
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individuals
intrest
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interest
 to learn the
language
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 out of
will
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the will
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. School should never force the children to learn all the
language
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 it might stress the kid might
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loose
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lose
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intrest
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interest
 in going to school.
School
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 should always have an alternative program for the children who would like to learn in
there
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their
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 own comfortable
language
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. Advantage of
of
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know
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 multiple
languages
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 will give
more
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you more
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confident
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 and courage to travel
many
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to many
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countires
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countries
 and meet with local
people
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 and helps
to
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you to
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 know more about the history and culture of the
people
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.
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, when a foreigner
visit
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other country
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another country
other countries
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 who can speak in
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the there
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there
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their
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 local
language
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 will make locals
to
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connect with them easily. These days with the help of technology there are many mobile applications
is
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 developed to translate
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language
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the language
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. These
advance
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advanced
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techologies
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technologies
 will help
people
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 travel easily. In my opinion,
its
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 good to teach kids foreign
languages
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, but ensure the kids should be given equal importance to
learn
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there
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their
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 own
language
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