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The shortage of housing in big cities can cause severe consequences. Only government action can solve this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In today’s era, the problem of housing is seeming to be rising especially in big cities. There are many
people
 who go to big cities because of their family issues.
Also
, the large majority of
people
 and a smaller number of
land
 results in the problem of housing which will
further
 have many consequences. It is said that
,
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 the housing shortage, can be only solved by
government
 action. I agree with
this
 notion. In
this
 essay, I will elaborate on the consequences and
also
 discuss my viewpoint.
Firstly
, the
government
 has the powers to control and maintain well all individuals.
Government
 should give some extra facilities to big cities where there are a greater number of
people
. It’s the responsibility of the
government
 to provide job opportunities to everyone. So, that
people
 can enjoy their life and has a proper house to build with sufficient money.
Secondly
, the
government
 should take the
land
 taxes less, so that it becomes easy for a person to maintain their financial levels, which means, a person can buy the
land
 and make their house as they want.
For instance
, I read in Tribune that 30% of
people
 in Rattan are living below the poverty line and the village is considered to be very big, but there is a problem with the housing shortage.
People
 do not have their homes which will impact their lives as well as their children. Those persons seem to be more mentally and physically ill.
Furthermore
, the
government
 should construct
a new buildings
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 for those
people
 who cannot afford to buy
land
 or make their big houses. Due to the larger number of
people
, which give rise to expensive
land
 and that
land
 is not affordable for the common man which leads to a shortage of houses. In conclusion, it is clear that
government
 have a major responsibility to tackle
this
 issue.
Government
 should build new buildings and townhouses that can afford
people
 at a genuine price. Through
this
,
people
 can live stress-free.
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