Last month you had an overseas holiday with a friend from your college. They have just sent you some holiday photos together. In your letter: thank them for the holiday and the photos Explain why you didn't write earlier. invite them to come and stay with you

Hi Cartoon and Sasi, How are you doing? It was a very precious
moments
Correct the article-noun agreement
moment

The indefinite article a may not be required with the plural noun moments in this sentence. Consider removing the article, or changing the noun to singular.

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while we were in Spain. I want to thank you for your kindness and
helpful
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help

The word helpful doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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during our trip
and
Correct word choice
apply

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all the photos are
incredible
Change the adjective
incredibly

It appears that the adjective incredible is attempting to modify the adjective beautiful. Consider replacing it with an adverb.

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beautiful. I
cound
Correct your spelling
could

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not imagine how I would have fun without you guys. I was
closely
Replace the adverb
close

It appears that the adverb closely should be an adjective. Consider replacing it.

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to
final
Add an article
the final

The noun phrase final exam seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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exam after we were
sparated
Correct your spelling
separated
spared

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and
that is
why I did not write
you
Change preposition
to you

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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earlier. I hope you did not feel bad about it. One more thing, I just moved to a new apartment and want to have a small party with you two. The party will
be hold
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be held

It appears that the form of the verb hold does not work with be in this sentence.

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on Sunday 13th August
at
Change preposition
in

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the
Correct article usage
apply

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room 456 New Street road. I will probably cook some Japanese food and make some Danish pastries so If you want something in
partically
Correct your spelling
particularly
practically
partially

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just let me know and I will try to prepare them. Looking forward to hearing from you and thanks again for the wonderful trip. Best Wishes,
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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