Some people say that modern technology has made shopping today easier, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Nowadays,
technology
has become
the
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essential role all around the world. Some
people
agee
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agree

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that today's shopping is
simplier
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simpler

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with modish
technolgy
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technology

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, While others disagree.
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essay will illustrate both views, advantages and disadvantages. Presently,
Technology
is significant to everyone in different ways
such
as
,
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education which
help
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students learn more, transportation while
people
could know when the train or bus
are
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is

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coming, and the
last
one lifestyle. It could be
delivery
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food and shopping.
People
tend to
shopping
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shop

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more because of
technology
which is easier. It can be seen that
,
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apply

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they don't have to go to the mall, It's uncomplicated.
For instance
, the COVID-19 pandemic has made shopping difficult with many in-person stores closed. With
technology
,
people
can now order products through the internet without leaving their homes.
Additionally
, there are export and import containers through countries,
which
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where

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people
can
shopping
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shop
be shopping

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from
foreign
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a foreign

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country
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countries

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and get what they require.
However
,
technology
has brought about the advent of online shopping, it has
also
brought about endless options which can lead to indecision and too much time wasted to find the right item to buy.
In addition
, shopping may be more difficult because when buying certain items online, it may be difficult to gauge the correct size of items.
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, online sales
does
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do

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not allow for fitting before purchase when buying clothing or shoes. In conclusion, modern
technology
made shopping easier and
It's
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Its

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advantage
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an advantage

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for
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the individual
an individual

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individual
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individuals

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. I think that
technology
is the best option for
people
who do not want to leave their house.
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