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People trend to travel longer distance nowadays than in the past. What are reason for this? Is this a positive or negative trend?

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individuals
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 tend to
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 more long
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 than in past
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. I am going to interpret
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 I am going to give my own opinions on the examples that I am going to discuss. To start with,
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 is obvious that nowadays
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distances
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 are not more important as before. Because of new technology and new growing knowledge
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 can
travel
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 all over the world much easier than before. To give an example, if someone wants to
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 a long distance it should take a few
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 for him/her to arrive at the destination.
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 went on a journey with houses or with their own species
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 why it takes too long for them to
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. There was a huge peril with
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 who wants to go on a loge distance journey.
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, there must be unforeseen problems on the road like bad weather or facing wild animals which is a menace to humankind.
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, nowadays
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travel
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 very calmly and comfortably. Undoubtedly
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 can
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 loge
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 in a shorter time and easier than before. All
people
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 should thank Wilbur Wright who invented the aeroplane. Which made a huge revolution in the travelling system. To explicate it, now
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 can
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 by airline safe and fast.
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, the plane is not the one and only devise for a tour we have railways, buses, and of course personal cars. But the fastest way to go on a tour is a plane undoubtedly. To sum up, as I discuss
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travel
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 much easier and more comfortable,
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 why they tend to
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 long
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