Scientists and technlogy experts seem to be more valued by modern society than musicians and artists. To what extent do you agree?

In 2007, there is a
cross
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crossroad
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road
infront
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in front
of the
City
hospital. We should get on
city
road
then
turn in to hospital
road
to go to the final point. And along the hospital
road
, there are
car
parks which were staff and public. What’s more, around the
hosipital
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hospital
is a ring
road
. In 2010, the same is that the ring
road
exist. And we
also
should go on
city
road
then
hospital
road
. The difference is that there are two rings at the junction of
city
road
and hospital
road
, ring
road
and hospital
road
. There is
also
a new bus station so that we can take
bus
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the bus
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get
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to get
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to
hospital
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the hospital
a hospital
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directly. The staff
car
park is separated
with
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from
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public
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the public
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park. From my view, the change of the layout of
road
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the road
a road
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can make the
road
in front
city
hospital more unblocked and the
effiency
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efficiency
of the transport improved greatly, with the bus stop, we can get to
hospital
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the hospital
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easier. The separation of two
car
parks
make
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makes
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the
adminste
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admins
administer
of the
car
easier and
convenient
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more convenient
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. It’s a successful change.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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