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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices

#people #choices
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Naturally, when we are making decisions, we want to have choices.
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,
people
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 often claim that our options are more than enough. I completely agree with the opinion, the reasons are what we will be looking at in
this
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 piece.
First
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 and foremost,
revolution
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the revolution
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 of science and technology widen the source of information. In recent years, the use of mobile devices and the internet become more and more common in the world,
people
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 can obtain information by surfing
internet
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the internet
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 conveniently.
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, in the past, ladies shopped around for purchasing new clothes, but they can find
a satisfied dresses
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 on websites like Amazon and eBay.
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, it is a trouble of showing thousands of products with different brands and styles when
people
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 only want to buy one piece of clothes. It is hard and
time consuming
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 to make a choice. Another reason that makes us
to
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have more options is the increased level of educational literacy.
People
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 do not select the things which are totally unknown.
This
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 rise
of
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in
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 knowledge lead
people
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understand
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information
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the information
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 in more detail,
in other words
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, they have more choices.
Although
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 we have numerous selections, lacking
experience
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the experience
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 to define what we need is
also
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 a great problem. Actually, normal
vegetable
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vegetables
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 and meat can
fulfill
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fulfil
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people
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's
need
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needs
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, but
people
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 prefer organic food after knowing the importance of nutrition. They look into the place of production,
search
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and search
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 the list of ingredients. Sometimes, they are finding
a
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 best choice
instead
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 of a suitable one. To sum up, due to the breakthrough of technology and improvement of
people
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's educational level, I wholeheartedly deem that there are too many options available for us.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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