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Presently, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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In
this
 modern world, aged
people
 are becoming less compared to young adults,
this
 situation make confusion among crowd regarding whether it is good or bad. I personally think
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 the advantages and disadvantages are in an equal proportion,
this
 essay points out both merits and demerits of
this
 situation. If we look into the benefits of having more youngsters, they are the future of the nation, they have more potential for inventing new technologies
as a result
, the economy of the country get better.
For example
 ,young scientists found various kinds of vaccination against the covid virus ,
Moreover
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 after retirement age, old
people
 cannot function well physically or mentally , in that situation we need a more efficient society.
However
, the retired community
also
 play an important role in moulding a new
generation
, in the science of , educating their future about the value of ancient culture and its need to be continued to the
next
generation
.The ayurvedic treatment in India is a better example of the above statement, the older
generation
 knows how to treat sick
people
 by using
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natural remedies. But unfortunately, some middle age group is not ready to learn these values, so these types of skills are fading away from our community. To conclude, even though there are certain advantages of having an old age group in our society for passing our traditional culture and educating the coming
generation
 regarding the lessons they earned from their experience, in order to compete with
this
 modern era, for the existence ,the country needs young
people
.
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