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Some believe that nuclear weapons benefit the world at large. to what extent do you agree or disagree.

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It is undeniable that military force plays a crucial role in each country. it is argued by some that it would be beneficial for governments to produce and have nuclear
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. personally, I completely disagree with
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 a weapon could be misused by powerful countries. what I mean is that as governments are completely aware of its detrimental effects, they could threaten others by using
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 a bomb.Take the Russian invasion of Ukraine as a clear example. If Russia did not have nuclear
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, other countries would presumably have forced Russia not to continue the war.
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, not only are nuclear weapons capable of killing a vast number of people and creatures in a split
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 but it
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 has long-term catastrophic impacts on humankind, animals and the environment. As a consequence, if a nuclear weapon exploded accidentally or deliberately in a war it would make that place uninhabitable.
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, in the World War 2, when America utilize 2 nuclear
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 on Japan, more than 150000 residents were killed, and babies would be born with the genetic disorder until 3 decades later. even though, in my opinion, having nuclear
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 would be definitively harmful to everyone due to its serious consequences, it would be necessary for every country in the real world as long as other nations are of the nuclear
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