Some cities create housing for their growing population by providing taller buildings. Other cities create housing by building on wider areas of land. Which solution is better?

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a key obstacle in many metropolitan cities in the world
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creating skyscrapers other cities solved their population crowd staying issue
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making wider homes
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of the buildings in the past illustrates, a planty of the wide-made buildings as our ancestors select to stay in
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as villas usually have a yard which families can connect with nature and enjoy activities
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, in some cases because of less technology involved in building wider architectures they are considerably cheap and affordable.
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, in many areas of the USA people prefer to select to stay in villas as they are much cheaper than
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skyscrapers
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, wide edifices tend to be safer and more reliable.
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to be stronger in the case of earthquakes. When a construction
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on a wider land there would be more freedom to run away from the disasters
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as earthquakes or Tsunamis.
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, they are environment friendly, most of these scriptures have been
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much far from city centres which
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can lessen the deoxid carbon emission as fewer cars will be used to commute.
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, they need less transportation for sending children to school. All in all,
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, some think skayscraptures are a perfect remedy for most
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cities I believe,
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larger homes should be taken as an acceptable solution because
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they are comfortable, economical and environmentally friendly.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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