IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6.5

The environmental problems facing today's world are so great that there is little ordinary people can do to improve the situation. Government and large companies should be responsible for reducing the amount of damage being done to the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#world #people #situation #government #companies #amount #damage #environment
There is a saying that citizens tend to play a less important role in charging some matters related to the protection of the
environment
 than the authorities and other organizations can do in the background of an increasing number of global environmental issues. From my perspective, l disagree with
this
 point.
To begin
 with, at the heart of
this
 matter is that the process of carrying out these essential events pro-
environment
 will not be successful without the participation of residents.
In other words
, it may be common to witness plenty of barriers among the public when it comes to executing due to the weak awareness of public
environment
 protection. According to a report, the American government was struggling with the parade of workers who lost their jobs in the chemical factories, since they had to close down a lot of chemical plants which caused damage to the air quality in the US, in order to meet the standards of the Environmental Protection Council.
In addition
, the individuals will have a hugely positive impact on changing the current situation of surroundings, if they are able to be guided correctly to achieve something they can do for developing the
environment
,
although
 it seems to have limited effects at the beginning. To be more specific, once buyers consciously start to resist the detergent with a certain harmful ingredient doing harm to the domestic water resource in some rivers, l believe that more and more industries which engaged in the production of
such
 a commodity will transfer their original idea to manufacture some environmentally-friendly goods. All in all, as long as every individual unite and make their contribution to improving the
environment
, our earth will be a better place to live for us and our descendant.
Submitted by testtaker1 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: