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Planting trees is very important for the environment. Some people say trees should be planted in the vacant area of cities and towns .while other believe housing facilities should be built instead. Do agree or disagree?

#trees #environment #people #area #cities #towns #facilities
As all of
we
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 are aware of global warming,
people
 are encouraged to mitigate the world temperature by planting
trees
in
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everywhere.
However
, a few
people
 argue that
trees
 should be planted either
in
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on
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outskirts
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the outskirts
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 of the
cities
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city
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center
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centre
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 or
rural
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in rural
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area
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areas
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. It
is disagreed
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disagrees
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 that the idea of
trees
 should have only
in
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free space. It should have in everywhere because of its huge benefit.
People
 in Asian countries know the value of the
trees
specially
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 in hot seasons. In
metropolis
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the metropolis
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area
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areas
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, most of the places are crowded with
condomenium
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condominium
condominiums
, apartments, hotels, hospitals and community
building
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buildings
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, so on. In order to get fresh
air
 and to have good ventilation, plants play the main role
for
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in
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this
 environment. They provide shadows not only to human
being
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beings
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 but only
animals
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to animals
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 to make their accommodations. Due to the carbon emission from various
type
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types
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 of vehicles
in
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downtown, the
air
 is polluted and it damages the
people
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people's
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 health. As
such
by
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apply
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planting
trees
 along the main roads provide sufficient oxygen and
reduce
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reduces
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the
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apply
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air
 pollution.
Moreover
,
in
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big cities have
seveal
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several
 buildings but there should have a place
for example
 small parks to do sports and exercise for all generations.
In
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 the weekends, families can go a
pinic
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picnic
panic
 and students can relax and hang out with their friends. In
this
 case, various kinds of small and big
trees
 are needed including planting
variety
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a variety
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 of beautiful flowers. To be green and to decorate a city , it needs some space to grow the
trees
.
Although
 it may
reduces
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reduce
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 some parts of cities area,
owever
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however
,
trees
 are essential in the environment and community have several benefits.
On the other hand
, the government would relocate the necessary buildings
in
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out of the town or suitable locations. Alternatively, the downtown has less
air
 pollution and traffic jams and
people
 will get
more
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a more
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 healthy and peaceful lifestyle. As mentioned above, plants and
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trees
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tress
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trees
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 are involved in
crucial
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a crucial
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 role in
people
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people's
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 daily life as well as it is protected the environment and global warming.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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