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the growh of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. do you agree or disagree?

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In today's modern world, there is a raging debate whether the traditional methods of shopping in towns and cities will one day give their places to the E-commercial websites? In
this
 essay, I shall argue the statement using wide
varieties
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 of examples to demonstrate salient points followed by providing a reasoned conclusion. Personally,I strongly disagree with
this
 view. because I opine that,there are some attractive qualities in physical shopping that cannot be found in virtual shopping.
For instance
, there is no amusing activity in shopping through your mobile but let’s
considering
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 a shopping mall with a playground on the
last
 story while there is a board-game Café on the
next
. The point is that
,
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 shopping in a big mall takes a lot of energy
also
 it makes you hungry and tired
which
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 classical shopping offers you the chance to use the recreational facilities in the mall.
Additionally
, your children will find it enjoyable and you can use your visits to shopping malls as an opportunity to spend quality time with family and friends.
Beside
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, real stores provide you
a
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convenient method for purchasing.
for example
,many tend to try the piece of clothes or shoes they want to buy and physical stores make it possible for them.
Although
 online sellers provide an easy way to
fulfill
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 the requirements of shoppers I am of the opinion that, classic shops have more practical methods that will overcome all these obstacles. Maybe with some difficulties but it is not unimaginable. To summarize, I have to admit
tha
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that
,
however
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 online markets will eventually dominate because of the ease and
flexibilitie
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flexibility
 they bring, as I manifested above the existence of traditional shops will not eventually diminish under no circumstances.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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