Some people believe that school children should be made to wear a uniform. Others feel that children should be free to choose their own clothes. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

With the increase in population, schools are
also
getting increased
year-by year
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. Where, some
people
believe that
children
should be made to wear
school
uniform
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while, others think that
children
should not be restricted to wear
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a uniform
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uniform
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, they should be free to choose their own clothes.
This
essay will discuss both the views and my opinion
thereafter
.
To begin
with, I agree with
people
who believe that
school
children
should be made to wear
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a uniform
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uniform
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.
This
should be mandatory, as
uniform
teaches
children
discipline, helps to identify the identity of a
child
,
helps
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and helps
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to
indentify
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identify
the
school
.
Furthermore
,
uniform
helps to bring
the
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unity among the
children's
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children
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. For an instance, if an event is organised in a particular
school
and most of the
children
are not wearing a
uniform
, it will get difficult to identify the
school
of that
child
.
As a result
, leading to a misjudgement in the evaluation.
On the other hand
, there are certain
people
, who feel that
children
should be free to choose their own clothes.
Children
should not be restricted to wear uniforms, rather they should be free to wear whatever they want to.
For example
, there are
various
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school
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schools
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in
USA
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the USA
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, where
children
are free to wear anything in the
school
, they believe a
child
should not be examined by what he/she is wearing but
from
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caliber
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and
potential
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a
child
holds.
In addition
,
children
bring home dirty
uniform
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, due to which, parents face a hard time getting the
uniform
clean on the daily basis. In conclusion, my opinion is inclined toward those
people
who believe that
school
children
should be made to wear
uniform
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due to
above
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factors,
although
they should be allowed to wear whatever they want on a few days a week.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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