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Some people believe that the experiences children have before they go to school will have the greatest effect on their future life. Others argue that experiences gained when they are teenagers have a bigger influences. Discuss both the views and give your own opinions

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Though a number of
people
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 believe that the
experiences
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children
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 gain prior to schooling have
biggest
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 impact on their upcoming
life
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 to learn the
manners
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 of the society and
to
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become socialize, a section of society opines that the
teen
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teenage
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age
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experiences
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 can be more beneficial in the form of preparing them to act according to the behaviour of the
people
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 and to take the decisions wisely.
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 with, there are multifarious reasons why
people
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 advocate the importance of
experiences
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 of
children
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 before going to school as these can give an example of social
manners
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 at home and these
manners
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 can be a base root to get a civilized
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lifestyle
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life style
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lifestyle
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 in the
future
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.
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: table
manners
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 and understanding the word selection before speaking to elder
people
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 in the family can give assist
children
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 to be
a
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good
student
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students
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 and
a
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good
person
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people
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 in the
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.
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, frequent talks and help
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 domestic chores before attending school can make a child
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 as well as
open
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be open
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 to
learn
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 more and more things.
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, these
experiences
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 can be the base root for a better
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of
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children
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 that they can obtain before starting their schooling. On the other side, the
experiences
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 that
children
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 gain in their
teen
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teenage
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age
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 can be conducive
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to
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 their
future
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life
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 since these can impart a good pragmatic knowledge of the behaviour of other
people
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. To explain, when
children
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 are in their
teen
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teenage
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age
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, they may have a good level of maturity to understand the double face of
people
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 and their
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intentions
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intensions
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intentions
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 behind every action so
such
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experiences
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 are necessary to judge the
people
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 timely.
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, these can help them a lot in their professional world.
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, the
experiences
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 that
children
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 have when they are in their teenage can make them able to take
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a wise
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decision
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 because
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age
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 is always considered
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the turning point of their
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. A survey conducted by The Guardian newspaper in March
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 2015 revealed that many adults had been taking
right
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the right
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 and wise decisions since they believed that their teenage
experiences
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 had positively
affacted
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affected
 their
decision making
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decision-making
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 ability.
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,
such
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 practical decisions from
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age
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experiences
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 can tremendously help
children
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 in their professional and personal
life
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 in
future
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. To conclude, some
people
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 believe the greatest importance of
experiences
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 of
children
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 before schooling while
other
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others
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are concern
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concern
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 about the significance of the
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 of their teenage. I personally believe the
experiences
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 of
children
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 when they are in their
teen
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teenage
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age
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 can contribute a lot to
make
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making
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 them a good decision
maker
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makers
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 and act according to
people
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's behaviour.
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