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In many countries today, the eating habits and lifestyles of children are different from those of previous generation. some people say this have had a negative effect on their health.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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In many countries today, the eating
habits
 and
lifestyles
 of
children
 are different from those of the previous generation. some people say
this
 has had a negative effect on their health. In the following paragraph, I will explain the reason that I disagree with
this
 opinion. On the one hand, In point of the eating
habits
 and
lifestyles
 of
children
 that are different from the past, I think people need to realize that the world societies are becoming capitalist.
Accordingly
, All parents must divide
a
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 time to raise
children
 and work
for
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to
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 earn a living. I truly accept that some parents
not
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do not
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 enough to spend time and money to find
a quality food
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quality food
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 for their
children
, especially in developing countries where the proportion of the population is poor.
Accordingly
,
This
 factor can affect to
habits
 and
lifestyles
 of
children
 worse than
the
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 past.
On the other hand
, If a child was born
in
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into
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 a rich family, a lucky child can have a quality of life different from others. he/she will eat clean food with more nutrients and live in
family
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 that all members take care of. In
this
 case, a child will have suitable food and
lifestyles
 that are better than the previous generation. In conclusion, It can be summarized that in many countries, the eating
habits
 and
lifestyles
 of
children
 are different of the grandparent's generation.
However
, It depends on luckily in
children
 whether they stay in
best
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the best
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 family or not.
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