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amaj alizadeh: some people think that individuals are becoming more dependent on each other in modern society; while others believe that individuals are becoming more independent of each other. discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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2022] amaj Alizadeh: Nowadays, the number of
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 who argue about how individual life could affect the personality of
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 encounter others in an advanced
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 is becoming more and more. In the forthcoming paragraph, I shall explain my point of view which I think that
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 could live individually but those have to depend and each other. On the one hand, today many
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 around the world especially in modern
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 getting used to living individually and technologically. Not only using some technology like mobile phones and the internet could create
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 illusion that
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 can live without any relationship but
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 could develop
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 detrimental idea that no one needs anyone oneone. A good instance is someone who stays at home for a long time and orders his food goods and grocery without any cooperation; it is clear that after a while he stays away from others because he thinks he is independent. It is obvious that
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 in the world are social and live in a community; depending on technology
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 of each other does not work. On other hand, humans are neutrally social which is base of every
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. someone living in modern
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 ought to pull together to overcome problems. It can not be denied that individuals need each other because a person has a wide range of talents and abilities. In some cases, some
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 havelived independentlyt but still should have kept away from others.
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, a person living in a house probably is not able to repair a mechanical system and fix the problems of wastewater piping which can expect that those needs a professional person. these days, no one can not say that I live independently without any help, and depending
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 individuals could improve their ability but eventually have to collaborate with someone. [11:39 PM, 6
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2022] amaj Alizadeh: to sum up, living lonely indeed improves the ability of
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 to be independent but in modern
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 living individually has been developed causing
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 to think that it is living independently; try to keep away from each other
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 it is impossible. my point of view is those who like to live independently must accept that can not in all aspects of life stand on their feet.
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