amaj alizadeh: some people think that individuals are becoming more dependent on each other in modern society; while others believe that individuals are becoming more independent of each other. discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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[10:56 PM, 6

2022] [11:31 PM, 6

2022] amaj Alizadeh: Nowadays, the number of

people

who argue about how individual life could affect the personality of

people

encounter others in an advanced

society

is becoming more and more. In the forthcoming paragraph, I shall explain my point of view which I think that

people

could live individually but those have to depend and each other. On the one hand, today many

people

around the world especially in modern

society

getting used to living individually and technologically. Not only using some technology like mobile phones and the internet could create

this

illusion that

people

can live without any relationship but

also

could develop

this

detrimental idea that no one needs anyone oneone. A good instance is someone who stays at home for a long time and orders his food goods and grocery without any cooperation; it is clear that after a while he stays away from others because he thinks he is independent. It is obvious that

people

in the world are social and live in a community; depending on technology

instead

of each other does not work. On other hand, humans are neutrally social which is base of every

society

. someone living in modern

society

ought to pull together to overcome problems. It can not be denied that individuals need each other because a person has a wide range of talents and abilities. In some cases, some

people

havelived independentlyt but still should have kept away from others.

For example

, a person living in a house probably is not able to repair a mechanical system and fix the problems of wastewater piping which can expect that those needs a professional person. these days, no one can not say that I live independently without any help, and depending

although

individuals could improve their ability but eventually have to collaborate with someone. [11:39 PM, 6

2022] amaj Alizadeh: to sum up, living lonely indeed improves the ability of

people

to be independent but in modern

society

living individually has been developed causing

people

to think that it is living independently; try to keep away from each other

however

it is impossible. my point of view is those who like to live independently must accept that can not in all aspects of life stand on their feet.

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amaj alizadeh: some people think that individuals are becoming more dependent on each other in modern society; while others believe that individuals are becoming more independent of each other. discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

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