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Many modern films and television programmes about past event and people contain a mixture of fact and fiction. Some people say this distorts the public's view of history and should therefore be discouraged. What are your views? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

There is a popular opinion that many
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 and series based on historical
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 do not contain the whole truth and are actually a mix of facts and fiction. Some people think that
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 can distort our perception of history, and
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 their production should be discouraged.
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 is true and these motion pictures are fiction, I disagree with the statement. As I would argue, the purpose of these films is entertainment, and not educational.   As many modern films are inspired by historical
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 they try to tell their story as entertaining as they can. In
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 ,way they are more fiction than fact. Relationships, action and drama are added to keep the viewers involved in the story and create a connection between them and the characters. Generally, people need
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 sort of entertainment to distract themselves from the stress and problems of their existence.
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 is the reason why
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 in general have a positive effect on our lives. I can
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 add that
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, yes, watching historical
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 is not like reading an actual book about the subject, it can easily involve people on the topic. Every movie ever made about a true event starts with a disclaimer that it is “based”, or “inspired”, by a historical event, so it would not confuse the audience. From my personal point of view, these types of
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 have led me to read more about
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 that were of no interest to me before. Given these points, I think that
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 inspired by true
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 have greater popularity among the public and can easily provoke interest and even help education.

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To improve task response, consider providing more specific examples from modern films or television programs to support your argument. This helps to strengthen your position and provides evidence for your claims.
coherence and cohesion
Organize your paragraphs more clearly by ensuring that each paragraph addresses one main point. This can enhance the logical structure and make the essay easier to follow.
introduction and conclusion
The introduction clearly states the topic and your position, providing a strong start to the essay.
task achievement
You effectively argue that historical films are mainly for entertainment, which is a relevant and clear idea.
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The essay includes a thoughtful personal perspective, which adds depth to the discussion.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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