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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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Nowadays, despite, the development that had been through agriculture, numerous people across the world still starving.
However
, the main reason for
this
 matter is poverty,
in particular
 in developing
countries
 and the lack of support and donation from wealthy nations. In
this
 essay, I will argue some solutions to prevent
this
 matter.
To begin
 with, one major reason for
this
 problem is the poverty of a nation that does not own a well
economy
, which means they cannot afford to purchase goods or grains from other
countries
.
In addition
, the debt of developing
countries
 continues to grow at an alarming rate, even though they are suffering from bankruptcy due to poor economies.
As a result
, they cannot afford to purchase food and ultimately, the residents of
this
 country would be experienced famine.
Furthermore
, the donations that are been given by the rich
countries
 are not quite sufficient. What is more, there are not many
countries
 that donate to and fund other
countries
 that they struggling in their economies.
Hence
, starvation increased sharply in these
countries
.
On the other hand
, in purpose to avoid
this
 matter to occur in the future, one main solution that
countries
 could do is to enhance their
economy
 and create way services
such
 as
,
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 the automotive industry and expand as much as possible exports over imports.
Thus
, it will improve the gross domestic product (GDP), as the
economy
 is going to be up.
Moreover
, perceiving support and donation from well-economic
countries
 would be beneficial.
In other words
,
this
 will encourage the country to stand up and enhance its
economy
. In conclusion, I would argue that poverty is the major reason for the starvation
nevertheless
, attempting to enhance the
economy
 and get support from wealthy nations can prevent
this
 issue.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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