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It is considered that environmental problems are relevant and should be taken more seriously since they have a huge impact on our

lives

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, most

people

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do not take these issues seriously enough. Here are my thoughts on why the majority of

people

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do not care about the environment.

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, the main reason why

people

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do not give much thought to environmental issues is probably because it does not affect their daily

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yet. Environmental problems

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as the greenhouse effect, global warming or pollution are always occurring, but because they are not always evident and they do not have direct influences on

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lives

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people

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do not take

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this issue

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these issues

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seriously.

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, icebergs are melting which

make

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sea levels rise and

this

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will create extreme weather conditions like storms, hurricanes and typhoons. But since it does not affect us, we do not give it much consideration.

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people

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might think that their contributions make no or no difference.

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is not true, because contributions no matter how big or small would still have an impact

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improving the environment.

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, simple actions

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as throwing away your garbage, picking up trash, or recycling and reusing

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will help get rid of pollution,

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helping to spread awareness for

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around you.

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, a lot of

people

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do not care enough about environmental matters for many reasons,

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as being too subjective because they do not affect their

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yet and thinking their actions would not make a difference.

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coherence and cohesion

Continue to include clear introduction and conclusion paragraphs that summarize the main points of the essay.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

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Relevant & specific examples

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4 paragraphs

252 words

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