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It is considered that environmental problems are relevant and should be taken more seriously since they have a huge impact on our

lives

However

, most

people

do not take these issues seriously enough. Here are my thoughts on why the majority of

people

do not care about the environment.

Firstly

, the main reason why

people

do not give much thought to environmental issues is probably because it does not affect their daily

lives

yet. Environmental problems

such

as the greenhouse effect, global warming or pollution are always occurring, but because they are not always evident and they do not have direct influences on

human’s

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lives

people

do not take

this issue

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these issues

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seriously.

For instance

, icebergs are melting which

make

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makes

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sea levels rise and

this

will create extreme weather conditions like storms, hurricanes and typhoons. But since it does not affect us, we do not give it much consideration.

Secondly

people

might think that their contributions make no or no difference.

This

is not true, because contributions no matter how big or small would still have an impact

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improving the environment.

For example

, simple actions

such

as throwing away your garbage, picking up trash, or recycling and reusing

sure

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apply

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will help get rid of pollution,

also

helping to spread awareness for

people

around you.

To conclude

, a lot of

people

do not care enough about environmental matters for many reasons,

such

as being too subjective because they do not affect their

lives

yet and thinking their actions would not make a difference.

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