It is a natural process for animal species to become extinct (e.g. Dinosaur, dodos …) There is no reason why people should try to prevent this from happening. Do you agree or disagree?

In
this
contemporary epoch, animals become
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human living
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but distraction is an inevitable process of nature
therefore
still
humans
are trying to stop
this
process. From my point of view,
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completely agree with the
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aforementioned
statement and I will explain with relevant examples. To commence with, Living creatures can not win over nature which
maens
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means
man
we can not turn summer into winter and can't stop thunderstorms as well. Just like ,
this
we can not put a curb on extinction.
For example
, If
dinosaurs
would not
vanished
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from
this
earth
then
it would have created some inconvenience for
humans
. That means If
this
galentic
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galactic
galenic
creature did not erase from
this
land
then
maybe human
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could not
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into the existence and some new creatures as well. The world with
dinosaurs
creates difficulties for mammals. They probably wouldn't have had the same opportunity to kind of take over the world.
Furthermore
, Some researchers argue that, even without the asteroid, the reign of the
dinosaurs
may already have been ending because
dinosaurs
were doomed anyway because of cooling climates. They would not be able to fill all of those ecological niches that those
dinosaurs
once filled. They would still probably be small, scrawny, and very generalized. But
instead
, the mammals were able to evolve and diversify and, well, ultimately, millions of years later, become some
humans
. So perhaps we would not have been here if it weren't for
this
extinction event 65 million years ago. To conclude, If we will able to stop extinct, it would be a great experience to live with some innocent creatures like the "dodo" but
this
is a cycle of nature we
humans
can not control
this
process.It has to be done in any circumstances
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