It is a natural process for animal species to become extinct (e.g. Dinosaur, dodos …) There is no reason why people should try to prevent this from happening. Do you agree or disagree?

#process #species #e #g #dinosaur #dodos #reason #people

this

contemporary epoch, animals become

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human living

practices

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but distraction is an inevitable process of nature

therefore

still

humans

are trying to stop

this

process. From my point of view,

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completely agree with the

aformantioned

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aforementioned

statement and I will explain with relevant examples. To commence with, Living creatures can not win over nature which

maens

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means

man

we can not turn summer into winter and can't stop thunderstorms as well. Just like ,

this

we can not put a curb on extinction.

For example

, If

dinosaurs

would not

vanished

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from

this

earth

then

it would have created some inconvenience for

humans

. That means If

this

galentic

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galactic

galenic

creature did not erase from

this

land

then

maybe human

being

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could not

came

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into the existence and some new creatures as well. The world with

dinosaurs

creates difficulties for mammals. They probably wouldn't have had the same opportunity to kind of take over the world.

Furthermore

, Some researchers argue that, even without the asteroid, the reign of the

dinosaurs

may already have been ending because

dinosaurs

were doomed anyway because of cooling climates. They would not be able to fill all of those ecological niches that those

dinosaurs

once filled. They would still probably be small, scrawny, and very generalized. But

instead

, the mammals were able to evolve and diversify and, well, ultimately, millions of years later, become some

humans

. So perhaps we would not have been here if it weren't for

this

extinction event 65 million years ago. To conclude, If we will able to stop extinct, it would be a great experience to live with some innocent creatures like the "dodo" but

this

is a cycle of nature we

humans

can not control

this

process.It has to be done in any circumstances

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Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

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