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Students perform better in school when they are rewarded rather than punished. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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children
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 had different actions which may lead to them to pleased or wrong one differs them reprimanded. I agreed with
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, but sometimes when they are punished for doing some negative performance, they become aggressive and defiant. The question is how we can facilitate them to achieve something in a good rather than abhorrent activities.
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 with, a positive attitude of the teens, teens are very curious to doing things. In a college when they performed something good, people are pleased with them, and they feel happier doing good. Whereas, when they did what is not appropriate, they are ignored. That means, rewarding defer them to choose excellent prosperous and they want to be stick with their performance.
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, they do not want to ruin their personality by doing something hell.
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,
parents
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 had a crucial role to play in their teen behaviour rather than anyone else.
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,
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 and teachers both play an important role to grow the young generation.
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, is not The
children
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 always behave very well, if they are being accoladed, due to positive reasons. an easy task for them. They should persevere to them and encourage them by doing great and beneficial aspects.
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, when
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 are motivated by their guardians and schoolteachers, they are more obliged and compelled to do an excellent accomplishment. So, in my opinion, no doubt,
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 are always anxious about their offspring and are constantly warned of pernicious effects. The
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 must behave like an innovator to their loved ones and try to convince them pragmatically.
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, in some cases, where the
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 are penalized for their irrelevant behaviour.
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 feel ashamed and try to humiliate them, in front of their teachers, which is the main cause of
children
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 who are indulging in a dangerous activity and
parents
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 are getting appalling results from them. I prefer to say,
parents
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 must encourage their kids to do better in school and be accoladed by honourable judges. Try to be polite towards them and enable them towards good deeds. In my opinion,
children
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 must be praised for their good deeds not only in school but
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 at home as well.
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 they will become a successful human in their future life.
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