Most people have forgotten the meaning behind traditional or religious festivals; during festival periods, people nowadays only want to enjoy themselves. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

There is an argument by some

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that nowadays many individuals no longer observe the reasons behind cultural and religious festivals rather they use

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period to only enjoy themselves.

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I strongly disagree with

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notion. In recent days thoughts are going about suggesting that the population that

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partaking in traditional and religious heritage are doing so in order to only have

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and they do not pay attention to the meaning of the festive period. But I refuse to agree with

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idea because up until date cultures and traditions are still one of the important courses

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being taught in schools so children still understand why

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occasions hold.

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, the celebration always

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hand-in-hand with the norms guiding it.

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Christmas,

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go to church to worship and they

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partake in other happy moments in the village square plus the gift they share among themselves depicting love. Another reason why I disagree with the stated opinion is

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the fact that

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still

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a lot for the sake of the ethics of the land.

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year, a lot of

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travel from far and near to celebrate

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important event with their relatives and neighbours thereby upholding its value which is unity and Peace. To illustrate

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of the country come back just to observe the new Yam festival and

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they partake in every

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performed on their special day. In

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there is a contentious argument that

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of individuals have abandoned the worth of their cultural and religious beliefs and

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instead

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they tend to only have fun among themselves.

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, I strongly disagree with

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conclusion

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and the reason for my disagreement is that cultural ethics and norms are still a subject in school up until

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day and youngsters have the knowledge about the importance and

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also

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sacrifice a lot to see that they respect the rituals of the country where they originate