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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent to you agree or disagree?

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Nowasday, people are more concerned on male and female should have equal opportunties, no matter on working evironment and school life.
However
, I strongly disagree that academy should accept equal number of male and female in every subject rather than concerning their abilities. I will elebrate my opinion in the below paragraphs.
First
 of all, unversities should be aware of male and female are different in different areas. Numbers of researchers have provided numbers of article to analysis the difference between men and female. In the article, which clearly states that male use their left brain to make their decisions in logical way.
In contrast
, female can use left and right brain to make their decisons involving emotion aspect.
For instance
, they are strong in different aspects.
For example
: male might be strong at graph and dimension.
On the other hand
, female is good at language and communication. If educational institution provide a offer to a famale student, who do not meet the course entry level, i.e. engineering course. It will de-motivate students from learning perspective.
Moreover
, considering admission should be determined on their suitability.
For example
: male might be weak at language area. When providing an offer to students
that is
 based on their academic results.
Thus
, it is difficult to quantify their talents, who are capable for the programme. At the result, people will be argued that the ranking is not reliable.
Additionally
, universities need to use the public funding in effective way. Most universities are funded by governments. It means taxpayers have contribution part of funding to educational institution. In fact, academy cannot provide unlimited offers to students, their services would be based on the size of fund, which will not be waste taxpayers contribution and put the resources in an appropriate system. In conculsion, universities should consider their talents rather than just providing equal opporunities for male and female without abilities assessment.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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