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Immigration has a major impact on the society. What are the main reasons of immigration? To what consequences can it lead?

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It is undoubtedly that many
people
 are immigrated to other countries because of better job opportunities and living standards. In
this
 essay, I intend to discuss some causes and consequences of
this
 trend in
further
 paragraphs.
To begin
 with, the main reason is that they want to seek better job opportunities. In their mother
country
, they are difficult for their living and
Fix the infinitive
to
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find a new job.
In addition
, sometimes the educated
people
 did not get appreciate what they have done and cannot get a chance to contribute their skills. The other reason is that if you are living in a poor
country
,
people
 want to get a better living standard than they cannot get in their home
country
.
For example
, Singapore is one of the safest countries in the world
although
 their living cost is really expensive if you are a permanent resident, you will have a better opportunity for your jobs, incentives and other health benefits. On contrary, there are some drawbacks to migrating to another region. A cultural barrier is one of the challenges for all immigrants.
Firstly
, if you are an Asian, you immigrate to a Western
country
, undoubtedly, you will suffer culture shock because there is a huge gap between the cultural differences.
Secondly
, a foreigner is difficult to communicate with the other native folk,
consequently
, sometimes they will interpret the wrong direction.
Hence
, they will face problems when they are working with other citizens and they become conflicts in the community. In conclusion, no matter how many difficulties they face in immigrating to other countries,
people
 are eager to migrate for those above-mentioned benefits,
however
, there will absolutely encounter cultural barriers and language barriers if they immigrate to different destinations.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic migration
  • Asylum seeker
  • Diaspora
  • Expatriate
  • Refugee status
  • Work permit/visa
  • Demographic shift
  • Naturalization
  • Xenophobia
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Multiculturalism
  • Social cohesion
  • Immigration policies
  • Border control
  • Undocumented immigrants
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