most artists earn low salaries and should therefore receive funding from the governemnt in order for them to continue with their work.what are the advantages and disadvantages

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more essential. as far as I
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, nowadays the social media is the most powerful,
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  • national identity
  • financial support
  • stimulate innovation
  • economic benefits
  • preserve traditional arts
  • dependence
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  • censorship
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