Some people believe that our happiness depends on how much money we have. Others say that money cannot buy happiness. Do you think that having money is the key to happiness, or are there more important factors?

In
this
commercial world, some
people
measure everything in terms of
economy
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the economy
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. Some economists claim that
happiness
can be achieved using money and some individuals deny that viewpoint. In my perspective, knowledge and
happiness
do not rely on financial status rather it
is depends
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depends
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on human
health
and milestone achievements. To commence with, one cannot deny that wealth can buy comfort but not
health
. To explain more, some
people
can be
a
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rich but unhappy due to their ill
body
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bodies
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. To illustrate, some
people
might have a lot of bank balance but that will not save their lives when their crucial internal organs
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are damage
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damage
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,
as a result
, they lose
happiness
.
On the other hand
, some citizens who are
in
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below
poverty
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the poverty
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line or
middle class
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middle-class
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families spend their quality time with their family and friends
happily
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happy
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as they have
a
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good
health
. To provide a practical example, recently the Srilankan government is facing
bankruptancy
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bankruptcy
,
however
, their citizens do not lose their hope and
happiness
as they have good
health
.
Thus
,
this
is one of the reasons our
ancistors
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ancestors
often used
proverb
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the proverb
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"
health
is wealth".
Besides
health
, some
people
celebrate different
occassions
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occasions
for their shot and
long term
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long-term
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accomplishments in various stages of their life irrespective of
thier
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their
economic stability.
For instance
, students celebrate when they achieve
desired
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their desired
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grade, employees party
their
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for their
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promotions, parents organize
event
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an event
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for their
first
baby and many more goalposts that makes human beings happier
are
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keep
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kept
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motivated. These small or big achievements keep
people
happier which
are
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is
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no where
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nowhere
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related to their revenue.
Similarly
, when we consider happy citizens they are everywhere from
below poverty
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below-poverty
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countries to developed nations even though they do not have access to basic
necessaties
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necessities
.
Finally
, to recapitulate, some believe money can buy everything in life;
however
,
personally
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money is just one factor that sometimes helps to buy comforts but not enjoyment
rather
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but rather
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human feelings, family, well-being and milestone accomplishments that contribute to laughter.
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