In many countries around the world young people decide to leave their parents’ home once they finish school. They start living on their own or sharing a home with friends. Is this a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples.

After finishing schooling, young individuals nowadays prefer living away from their
parents
and in many nations, they often live with their
friends
on a sharing basis. I vehemently espouse that
this
is certainly a positive approach to
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them
self dependent
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and maintain
privacy
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of their
life
.
To begin
with,
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has not become famous among youngsters for no reason. To explain, a survey conducted by the Guardian Newspaper in March 2015 revealed that 65% of young
people
were keenly interested in living separately from their
parents
because they felt a sense of
self dependency
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at the time
of
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staying with
friends
.
Hence
,
this
trend may provide them
enough
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chances to deal with
day to day
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issues without
parents'
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help.
In addition
, since young
people
require a certain level of privacy in their
life
, they may feel
freedom
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to do anything in their
life
without any restrictions and
this
will lead them to a better
life
ahead. On the other side, a number of
people
raise a concern about their relationship with
parents
because staying with
friends
can restrict them from opening up in front of
parents
which may bring bad communication and
low
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level of bonding with their
parents
.
Moreover
, security issues are tremendously higher
while
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staying out with
friends
for young
people
. As if young
people
live with their
parents
, they do not need to worry about their safety.
Thus
, 13000 cases in the year
of
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2017 in the USA,
such
as robbery, rape and molestation have been reported by the Department of Police with young individuals who opted
residing
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with
friends
than with
parents
. To conclude, it is unequivocal that
such
a phenomenon of living away from
parents
to stay with
friends
on a sharing basis is conducive for young
people
to be independent and live their
life
with no interference.
Hence
,
this
is indeed a positive development.
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