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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good member of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, learning to be a good member of the community, is an interesting topic. How to learn? Where to learn? Let us illustrate both perspectives in the below paragraphs.
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 of all, learning is a life-long process. In reality,
children
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 would copy their
parents
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' behaviours.
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, the attitude of
parents
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 is one of the key factors that can affect
children
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's behaviours.
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,
children
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 copy their
parents
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' tone, behaviours or habits on daily basis. Because of
this
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,
parents
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 are playing a key
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 in their offspring, who is being good representatives without any guidelines.
On the other hand
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,
children
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 spend most of their time in school.
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, kids are more willing to listen to
teachers
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' guidelines. From
children
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's perspective,
teachers
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 are their
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 models, who will give credits and incentives to be one of the best students in school.
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, the teacher will choose the best students, who will appoint to be the leader in the classroom. The leader will become a representative, who needs to report to
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 on some critical factors.
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, kids are willing to focus on their studying in order to get credits from
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.
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, offspring will be taught to be good representatives in an indirect way. In conclusion,
parents
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 and schools are playing a major
role
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, which assisting youth to be good members of the community.
Parents
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 cannot pass their responsibility to schools. As we know,
children
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 will copy their
parents
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' behaviour and attitudes from infants, parenting is playing a significant
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, which has an incredible influence on
children
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.
Children
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also
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 spend most of their time in educational institutions, no matter from kindergarten, or up to the tertiary academy. From my perspective,
parents
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 and schools are the members of our society, when both parties are willing to take up their roles, their offspring will automaticatically be good members of society in return.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • role models
  • moral values
  • social norms
  • structured environment
  • cooperation
  • respect
  • communal responsibilities
  • decision-making
  • societal integration
  • consistent messages
  • cultural expectations
  • complementary roles
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