Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Environmental problems are
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major issue around the world.
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, people
aware
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that
main
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natural disaster
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nowadays is the loss of great faunas and flora. Even though some people implicate there various other reasons especially, climatic changes. In
this
essay, I will discuss these two views and
finally
, I will elaborate on my opinion.
To begin
with, the major reason for the extinction of animals and plants, human beings are attempting to act in
a
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destructive ways which are harmful
for
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natural creatures.
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, over two years ago,
a
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Indonesian survey shows, that their native I du tiger had been killed by hunters
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a high level because these tigers had available medicines in their body parts.
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, when human beings have tried to kill them, particularly, these detrimental behaviours pave the way to create unbalanced food changes in
ecosystem
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the ecosystem

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as well as brutal competition among natural creatures .
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,
as
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some
group
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of communities emphasized that the climatic conditions are
the
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brutal issue in every part of the world.
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,
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global warming has created more negative effects
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the
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nature. For instance, in 2008, the Australian survey shows that 2999
of
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total wild trees and animals were killed by
wild fire
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.
Consequently
, wherever these climatic conditions are changed because of
human's
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human

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detrimental behaviours as well as it paves the way
pollute
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to pollute

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air land and so on. In conclusion,
extinction
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the extinction

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of natural trees and animals
as well as unhealthy climatic changes
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are the major environmental effects
in
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our planet. If we try to alleviate these problems, we will enable to protect
surrounding
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ecosystem. Unless we give our consciousness about
this
matter, we will be not able to overcome these brutal problems in our environment.
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