Some people believe that their teachers should not give school children homework, others believe that homework plays an essential role in the education of children. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

Education
is the golden key to surviving peacefully and happily. It is obvious that there are lots of debate about it. One of the debates indicates whether
homework
is essential or not. Some people believe that teachers should give
school
children
homework
, others believe that it does not play an essential role in the
education
of
children
. I am in favour of the
second
statement. In
this
essay, I will discuss both views and show how important is
homework
in our
education
system.
First
of all, there is a scientific fact that the human brain loose new information in 8 hours if they do not repeat it. Because of
this
fact, teachers and parents and
also
their careers have to be aware of
this
statement so they will understand that
homework
is
the
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one of the best ways to repeat what we learn new at the
school
.
In addition
to that fact, there are definitions
such
as short and long time memories. We all learnt from research that as long as we want to keep knowledge in our thought, we should regularly remind
it
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to
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ourself
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.
This
is the only way that
remember
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things properly. In
this
case,
homework
makes sense, in terms of reminding things. At
last
but not least, having
a
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homework
would be nice for
children
to engage
.
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So we can avoid them to get harmed
of
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watching tv and playing computer games all evening.
However
, especially in early age
education
,
homework
might be boring for students. In primary
school
education
, students may get bored in lessons just because of
homework
.
Furthermore
, parents may not have enough skills to teach their kids. At that point, they may lead kids wrong. All effort and time which is given by the teacher would be ruined at
this
point.
That is
for sure that no one wants to ruin teachers'
effort
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. In conclusion, neither having skilled parents nor getting bored under intense
homework
would not be the case for better
education
. There are scientific facts which show us that
homework
is essential for students.
That is
why I strongly believe that balanced and enough
homework
should be given to
children
by their
school
teacher.
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