Society is based on rules and laws. If individuals were free to do whatever they want to do, it could not function. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the above statement?

In
modern
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world, all countries are developed
by
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laws
and
rules
to ensure
citizen’s
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safety and maintain the function of
societies
. Some
people
argue that if
people
can do any things with the limitations of
laws
and
rules
,
then
societies
would be destroyed. I agree with
this
statement with my explanations below as well as providing examples to support my opinions. To commence with, some
people
receive well moral education since they are children
such
as
people
who are from Japan, Taiwan, and the United Kingdom. They can follow
rules
base
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on their ethics.
Therefore
, they can perform
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in public areas without
the
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enforcement
by
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laws
.
However
, we can not deny that some
people
are needed to be controlled by strong enforcement
by
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laws
.
For example
, Chinese
people
who
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are well-known
of
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their low moral standards. Numerous Chinese
people
throw rubbish everywhere and perform unacceptable actions to break
rules
. If there are now
laws
to control their
behavior
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behaviour
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, it is obvious that they can bring negative effects to the world.
Secondly
, some
researches
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have been found that
people
act
as
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like
a
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evil when
the
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societies
are collapsed.
People
steal things in supermarkets, break cars with violence, and fight with each other. These situations will
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be come
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become
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true if
rules
and
laws
are broken one day.
Therefore
, it is obvious that
laws
and
rules
are important elements in our
societies
. In conclusion, even though some
people
may think
laws
and
rules
affect the human rights of
people
. In order to create a comfortable and reliable society, it is believed that
laws
and
rules
can protect us to create
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social order
  • harmonious
  • individual freedoms
  • societal norms
  • unrestricted freedom
  • crime rates
  • dysfunctional
  • fair distribution
  • human rights
  • justice system
  • accountability
  • enforcing laws
  • restrictive regulations
  • societal functionality
  • legal frameworks
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