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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is predicted that the existence of printed newspapers and
books
 will be replaced by online
sources
 as they are cheaper. Personally, I strongly disagree with
this
 statement, as relevant online
sources
 will not be free of charge and reading
books
 on screen might be a source of
health
 issues. It cannot be denied, that in the contemporary epoch there is a rising number of individuals who prefer reading newspapers online, for various reasons.
However
, reliable online
sources
 are not freely accessible and presumably never will be. Companies producing online information have to pay employees and operating costs as any others.
Therefore
, they offer different stages of a subscription for customers,
otherwise
 would not be able to cover the expenses they have to face. I firmly believe that there is a defensible basis for the argument that online reading may worsen
health
 issues. It is irrefutable proof that screens deteriorate people's vision and may have a negative impact on the nervous system of their users. The University of Cambridge recently published an evidence-based paper which argues that proportionally to reading
books
 online during the evenings, their users struggle
health
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 problems.
For instance
, there is a rising number of individuals who need glasses ,
moreover
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 there is still an increasing proportion of people who suffer from insomnia due to electric noise from technological devices. To conclude, from the aforementioned examples, I disagree with the statement that no one will buy printed
books
 or newspapers on account
of
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relevant online
sources
 will not be free of charge.
Additionally
, reading
books
 from screens might be a source of
health
 issues.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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