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Others believe that a women’s role should be limited to taking care of the house and children. Which opinion do you agree with and why? Include specific details and examples to support your choice

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, followed by Nova Scotia (11%) and Quebec (10%) In 2001, the proportion in Alberta and British Columbia were almost equal (about 5%). After
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. Having the lowest rate among 8 provinces, the three regions including Manitoba, Ontario, Newfoundland, and Labrador had their ratio in 2001 at 3
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