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(22/10/2016) Some people believe that people have the right to university education, and government should make it free no matter what their financial background. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some
people
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 hold the belief that
university
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education
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 should be made free for everyone despite their financial status. While
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 idea may be beneficial, I partly disagree with
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 a point of view. In
this
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 essay, I will delve deep into both sides of the argument and give out my logical conclusion. On the one hand, there is a school of thought agreeing that
university
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 fees should be funded by the
government
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 because
university
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education
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 is vital for everybody, as it provides them with knowledge and skills needed for their future career.
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, many companies are more likely to hire
people
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 with
university
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 degrees rather than those who do not have degrees.
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,
people
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 could have more opportunities to get a well-paid job and constant income if they study at
university
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 and acquire a tertiary degree.
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, if
government
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 wholly funds
university
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 fees, there would be an enormous strain on
government
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 budgets as well as the finance of society.
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, the
government
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 should be under no obligation to finance students with their
university
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 costs because providing free tertiary
education
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 might make
government
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 and society bear a financial burden. As a matter of fact, there is social welfare that requires annual
government
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 expenditures to maintain
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 as health care and transportation. Funding free higher
education
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 for everyone would mean more money has to be spent by the
government
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.
This
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 either pushes the
government
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 to the verge of bankruptcy or levies higher taxes on citizens. In conclusion,
although
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 free
university
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 costs may be beneficial to some extent, I partly disagree with
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 a point of view and believe that
people
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 should pay their
university
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 fees.
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