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Some people say that punishment is the best way to teach children to behave well,while others disagree and point out that rewarding and praising them is better.Discuss both views and give your opinion

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According to a movie I saw, there was a sentence that I want to mention, It said : "Parents should be trained before they have a child".
That is
 exactly what I attempt to express. Parents have a responsibility to care for the kids;
however
, how many of them actually know everything and do the correct things? I believe there is no perfect answer, everything will depend on which circumstance.
Therefore
, in
this
 essay, I will interpret
this
 issue and point out the pros and cons, respectively. On the one hand, while someone claims that
punishment
 is a brilliant approach for these spoiled children, others state
punishment
 may bring permanent mental damage. In my opinion, discipline is allowed;
however
, it should only be done with restraint.
This
 means we have to use it appropriately.
For example
, when a child steals something without any remorse, severe
punishment
 should be exerted. Because
this
 crime could be a potential problem for society in the future. Strictly speaking, it should be corrected instantly with any form of measure.
On the other hand
, there were several research indicated that laud and prise indeed increase the future performance of those award owners.
Moreover
, compared to the
punishment
, friendly and genuine interaction could strongly help parents to build an intimate relationship with kids. But, here is a drawback which should not be ignored. Everyone likes to be complimented;
nevertheless
, some people may lose their initial faith and ambition when they drop in the full achievement.
For instance
, a famous case in the world. A young boy who had an incredible talent in music eventually failed in his life. When his father found him over-average performance, he held many concerts to earn tremendous wealth.
Although
 the father bought lots of rewards for that little boy. After consecutive exhibitions, the poor child lost millions of applauses and threw his goal and motivation, ultimately. As far as I am concerned, there are both advantages and disadvantages to each means. The best approach is to examine them by yourself since there could be billions of situations in
this
 world. The only thing is to find out which way is suitable for your own family.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • punishment
  • reward
  • reinforcement
  • discipline
  • boundary
  • behavior
  • self-esteem
  • motivation
  • intrinsic
  • consequence
  • fear
  • anxiety
  • resentment
  • positive learning environment
  • balanced approach
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