Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Thanks to the modern world, all products become accessible in comparison to the past.
People
can buy whatever they want by clicking the button on the internet. I am of the opinion that,
this
is
more
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a more
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negative
development
.  Becoming more similar is negative
development
mainly because it leads to
loss
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a loss
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of national identity.
In other words
, nations wear the same brands including Nike, Adidas and Mango, and make similar activities like reading and watching
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films
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. In long run, traditional features
in particular
trades and attitudes are neglected because habits have a significant effect on
people
's tendencies. Cooking traditional meals would be a great example of that,
people
are unlikely to less willing to cook those than past. 
Secondly
, it appears to me,
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similarity causes negative
development
in tourism as well.
People
who would like to see the other countries generally would like to become familiar with their cultural features
such
as cuisine and customs. If these are accessible around the world,
people
would lose their passion for
traveling
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.
This
leads to detrimental consequences for countries where tourism is an important source of income.
For instance
, there are those who post their traditional experiences on their blogs to share countries' unique sides with other
people
or give some advice
for
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other
travelers
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. In conclusion, higher living standards are a crucial reason for the positive aspect of buying the same products all over the world.
However
, because of the reasons that are mentioned in
this
essay,
this
similarity causes more negative
development
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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