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People nowadays tend to have children at older ages. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Having a child at an older
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 is increasing in popularity nowadays,
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, there is
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 a second group of people who want to have children at an earlier
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.
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 essay will demonstrate that the later someone has a child the more likely infants grow joyfully with them, and its advantages outweigh rather than raising children in imperfect life. The main reason for having infants
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 an older life is that they are not ready to be responsible for not only their children but
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 themselves. In
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 case, when individuals are not independent from financial problems and not working stable, it is more like the "baby" giving birth to a baby. Because of
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, it might lead infants to grow
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 with some problems,
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 as parents might not afford even their diapers, trips to qualified clinics, and medicines with vitamins. People who tend to have an infant at later ages know its drawbacks and,
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 choose to nurture them later. Those who oppose
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 say that giving birth at an older maturity may cause problems because of the women's health. It is well-known that good physical condition is not the same as it was when they were young, and it is difficult to maintain health, especially, women's health. A recent survey by Cambridge University found that the
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 from 20 to 30 years is best to give birth. In conclusion, there are merits and demerits sides of having a newborn at an old
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 and it seems to me that it has a beneficial impact on human life, and the positive aspects of having a child at a later
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 clearly outweigh its negative aspects.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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