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Some people think that only electric cars should be allowed on the streets by 2040. Do you agree?

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The usage of electric vehicles is constantly rising these days. A few people share the opinion that by the year 2040 no regular
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 should be driving on the roads anymore. I partly agree because
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 my opinion, it makes sense to ban them from the downtown areas but not from roads in general.
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, of course, a huge positive factor of a development like
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 would be the effect on our environment. The reduction of the pollution caused by regular gas or diesel
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 would be enormous. Especially in big cities like Tokyo where the air is so highly polluted that people need to wear face masks to avoid inhaling the smog.
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 is why prohibiting non-electric automobiles in city Centers is a relatable goal for the future. But where is see an issue is to ban regular
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 from every other street. Electric
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 are known for their minimal range what is ultimately leading to the fact that people have to charge them around every 350 kilometres.
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, it will take up to one hour or more to recharge.
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 might not appear as a problem in the city where you can leave your car at a special charging station while you go shopping. But it will be an unpleasant experience when you are heading on a road trip that will take 1000 kilometres. Developing a network of charging stations not only in cities but
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 in rural areas might solve
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 issue.
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 it is questionable if
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 is possible until 2040. In conclusion, I believe that banning regular
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 from cities is useful due to the environmental aspect. Despite
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 fact, a lot of development has to happen for electric vehicles and the surrounding network to make it a plausible goal for the roads in general in the near future.
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