IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 7

Some people think that leadership qualities are inherited by birth, others argue that it can be developed through life experience. Discuss both views and write your opinion.

#people #leadership #qualities #birth #life
NOWADAYS HAVING A SUCCESSFUL TEAM
LEADER
 IS COMPULSORY FOR COMPANIES TO SUCCEED. SOME PEOPLE THINK THAT THE QUALITY OF AN EXCELLENT
LEADER
 CAN BE SUPPLIED ONLY BY GENETICS WHILE OTHERS BELIEVE THAT IT CAN BE ACHIEVED THROUGH DEDICATION TO EDUCATION OVER THE YEARS.
THIS
 ESSAY WILL DISCUSS BOTH ARGUMENTS AND EXPLAIN WHY I AGREE WITH THE
FIRST
 VIEW. ON THE ONE HAND, A
LEADER
 CAN BE IDENTIFIED AT A VERY YOUNG AGE, BEFORE THEIR EXPERIENCE AND EDUCATION AS AN ADULT. TO ILLUSTRATE, LEADERSHIP CHARACTERISTICS CAN BE SEEN EVEN IN A PLAYGROUND. IT CAN BE SEEN THAT ONE PARTICULAR CHILD IS CHOSEN AS A
LEADER
 IN ALL GAMES BY NATURALLY. LEADERS CAN BE DESCRIBED AS THE MOST CONFIDENT AND INSPIRING PEOPLE EVEN THOUGH THEY WERE CHILDREN.
THIS
 CAN SHOW BEING A
LEADER
 MEANS BEING GIFTED, AND THAT CAN NOT BE GAINED THROUGH EXPERIENCES.
ON THE OTHER HAND
, SOME FEATURES
SUCH
 AS SHYNESS OR STRUGGLING WITH MANAGING A TEAM CAN BE OVERTAKEN BY DEDICATION OR EDUCATION OVER THE YEARS.
FOR INSTANCE
,
ALTHOUGH
 MY FATHER WAS QUITE A SHY AND INTROVERTED PERSON WHEN HE WAS A CHILD WHEN HE HAD TO BE IN CHARGE, HE ENROLLED ON SOME COURSES TO BECOME A GOOD
LEADER
 AND HE THRIVED ON THEM. NOW, HE HAS A SUCCESSFUL COMPANY AND A LOT OF PEOPLE ADMIRE HIM. TO SUM UP, EVEN THOUGH BEING A GOOD TEAM
LEADER
 CAN BE ACCOMPLISHED BY HAVING A PASSION FOR SUCCESS AND CONTINUING TO BE EDUCATED, GIVING INSPIRATION NATURALLY IS A DIFFERENT FEATURE WHICH CAN NOT BE LEARNT.
Submitted by dt.essrademir on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • inherited
  • charisma
  • decisiveness
  • confidence
  • personality traits
  • emotional intelligence
  • nurture over nature
  • education
  • training
  • real-world experiences
  • strategic thinking
  • empathetic communication
  • effective conflict resolution
  • perseverance
  • personal growth
  • genetic makeup
  • predisposition
  • conscious effort
What to do next:
Look at other essays: