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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. summearise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. summearise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The supplied line charts illustrate the purchase of electrical appliances for household purposes
in contrast
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 with the time dedicated to
housework
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, from 1920 to 2019 in a country.
Overall
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, refrigerators have become part and particle of
a
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apply
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human being as the user has increased dramatically over the period
years
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 and
further
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 vacuum cleaners are
also
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 popular appliance, which is widely used nowadays,
washing
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while washing
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 machines are less used than others.
However
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, the
hours
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 spent on
housework
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 every
week
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 have plunged. Refrigerators in 1920, were less popular than other appliances and
thereafter
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 in 1940 the purchases rocketed significantly and reached 100 per cent usage in 1980.
Furthermore
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, vacuum cleaners and washing machines were popular in the 1920s with 30 and 40 per cent respectively. Vacuum cleaners grew steadily over the
years
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 and reached 100 per cent of use in 2000
whereas
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, washing machines saw a slight downfall in 1980 and recovered over the
years
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. In 1920, the
hours
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 dedicated to
housework
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 was 50
hours
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 per
week
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, which declined rapidly to only 20
hours
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 a
week
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 in 1960 and continued to fall consistently over the
years
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 and
has
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reached 10
hours
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 a
week
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 in 2019.
To conclude
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, the time given to
housework
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 is depleted over the
years
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due to
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 the rise in electronic appliances.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words housework, years, hours, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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