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In the past, people used to get information from books. These days more and more people get it from the internet. Give reasons for your opinion and include any relevant examples.

#people #information #books #internet
Nowadays technology involves everything in our life. So, some group of
people
 saying that in the
last
 decade’s most of the population use to update their selves on the internet, while, in the
past
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people
 was searching their
information
 in the
books
, from my point of view I
agree
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onagree
toagree
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this
 statement. In
this
essay
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 I will look
online
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at online
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information
is
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that is
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popular
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more popular
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 than
books
 where used
in
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for
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an
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ages.
First
,
this
 affirmation is really true when we are looking
in
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at
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 our modern situation, cyber
information
 is very cheap cost, and available
in
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everywhere,
that is
 why
people
 tend to use websites to be up to date
in
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on
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 every side of life like
,
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 education, news, health tips, business and etcetera.
For instance
, when we were in
the
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school server
information
’s where not accessible as it is now, we were going to the library to search
our
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 assignments in ten different
books
. But, today students find anything they want while they are
on
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in
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 their bed.
However
, there
is
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are
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 a few
people
 more
people
 who still gain their knowledge in the
books
, and to be precise the online sources are reliable. Because, every person will write whatever he/she
want
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wants
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 whether it is right or wrong, so
the
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confidentiality is more like to
be bias
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be biased
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.
For example
, there is a teacher who was lazy, and gets his exams on the internet question and answers,
is
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it
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 would be ok if he takes only questions
their
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there
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 and answer his knowledge but no he was using
to
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it to
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 correct the answer that he got from the online, and that was far from the right answers as
result
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a result
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 of that whole student were been failed,
then
 university
search
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searches
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 the reason why all the student fail after days they found out the cause behind
this
 tragedy. In conclusion,
information
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the information
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 highway is something that makes our way of life easy and very convenient, since you are utilizing a
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trustworthy
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trust worthy
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trustworthy
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 web
pages
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page
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.
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