The charts below show reasons for travel and the main issues for travelling in the us in 2009

The charts below show reasons for travel and the main issues for travelling in the us in 2009
Both graphs provided tackle the subject of people’s movements from one place to another in the US in 2009. The provided bar graph shows the rationales behind
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movements, whilst the pie
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.
Overall
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that the highest percentage of
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was for commuting to and from work,
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the least percentage was for visiting families and friends.
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the greatest problem encountered by people was the pricing of the
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,
while
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was the space of pedestrian lanes. Regarding the line
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have recorded the lowest percentages (6% and 10% respectively), but
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for shopping hit a percentage equal to the sum of these 2 percentages (16%) which was slightly less
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the number of people travelling for personal reasons (19%).
On the other hand
, the greatest ranking of people was for commuting reasons to and from work (49%). Concerning the pie
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travelers
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(36%) which is nearly double the figure
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problems reported against aggressive drivers (17%) and safety concerns issues (19%). Meanwhile, space for pedestrians and access to public transport scored marginal percentages (6% and 8% respectively).
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