In some countries, more and more adults are continuing to live with their parents even after they have completed education and found jobs. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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years, an increasing number of young adults are opting to live with their
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even after finishing
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or getting a job.
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there are some benefits. In my opinion, the drawbacks overshadow the merits. On the one hand,
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might feel lonely and
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suffer from ageing ailments when they
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older.
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, if their
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live with
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, they can take care of them and spend more
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with each other.
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, staying in the family house can be beneficial for the young ones as they can save their money for renting
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, if a person is staying alone, the cost of living can get really expensive,
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in the family, the expenses are not borne by the individual alone.
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, there are disadvantages to
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cohabiting situation
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as lack of privacy. Young people will have to busy with their own life, so it is quite bothering them
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getting question y their
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asked why they are arriving home late which can
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create tensions in the relationship.
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, the young generation might not have a sense of responsibility since they tend to depend on their
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, children will wait for their
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to prepare their food or their
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do household which they
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themself when they live alone. In conclusion, with all the reasons mentioned above, I believe that the disadvantages of young people staying with their
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can outweigh the advantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cohabitation
  • intergenerational living
  • self-sufficiency
  • financial stability
  • maturation
  • dependency
  • socio-economic factors
  • familial dynamics
  • personal autonomy
  • housing affordability
  • cultural expectations
  • life trajectory
  • emotional resilience
  • nuclear family
  • joint family system
  • economic prudence
  • privacy concerns
  • social stigma
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