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Nowadays, many people have to work longer hours and they feel more stress out then before, what are the reasons and what can employer do to make their life easier.

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Stress and anxiety become a part of everyone's life. Many people are suffering from strains due to the hectic schedule of
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This
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reasons
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 and possible solutions to solve
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 schedule. They
work
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 12
hours
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 of jobs and have a lot of
pressure
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 from their subordinates.
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, they do not have time to spend with their family
members
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, a survey conducted by Japan found that in the
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 decade divorce rate is increasing by 60% due to a lack of time for family
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, some people
work
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 more
hours
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 to become in the good books of their manager and some
work
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 overtime due to the need for money. There are some solutions to tackle the above problem.
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, there should be strict working
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 for everybody so that they should not take the
pressure
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 from
work
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Secondly
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, subordinates should be polite and cooperative with their workers.
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, a company should organise some incentives
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 as
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long or short
trip
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 for their
employees
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 so that they can spend time with their family
members
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. It will reduce the
pressure
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 on
work
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 from
employees
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 and they will feel relaxed and will give more output than before.
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 , it will
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 help to improve their relationship with their family
members
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. To conclude, in my opinion, staff are under
pressure
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 due to longer
work
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hours
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 which affects their relationships and health. A company should help
employees
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 to reduce stress by giving vacation to
employees
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • workaholic
  • burnout
  • work-life balance
  • workplace stress
  • workplace flexibility
  • workload
  • responsibilities
  • globalization
  • competition
  • advancements
  • technology
  • support
  • resources
  • financial pressures
  • flexible work arrangements
  • stress management
  • wellness programs
  • skill development
  • advancement
  • positive work environment
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