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In many large cities, pelople waste hours of their time every day because of traffic congestion_on the roads. What are the causes of this? What solutions can yoj suggest?

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The larger the place the more issues associated with it, both on the positive side and on the negative side. Among various issues in big cities,
traffic
 congestion is the most concerning one in several ways. Surprisingly, the causes are very common and known to most
people
 and the solution is
also
 available for
this
. So, it is up to us, how we manage
such
 type of situation. As an initial point, concerning the cause of
traffic
 jams, I think, they are many
such
 as narrow
roads
, small space for making broader
roads
, non-avalabilityavalability of
traffic
 signals, and most concerning are the unfollowing the rules of
traffic
 light by the
people
. For example, I see most of the time in the morning, during office hours, that
people
 are not stopping at a red light and they cross it without any hesitation
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 so that they can reach early in the office.
As a result
, some more
people
 will
also
 follow
this
 attitude causing a situation of blocking the road. For
such
 a situation, I think
people
 either should leave their house five to ten minutes early
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 so that they don't need to disobey the
traffic
 light rules.
Additionally
, the construction of broader
roads
 will
also
 help in minimising the
traffic
. The presence of
traffic
 board signs on the
roads
 is
also
 equally important. I believe that some of these solutions will definitely help in reducing the congestion of
traffic
 on
roads
. In conclusion, I concur that
people
 waste so much time every day because of the rush on the
roads
, but managing the related issues will aid in minimising the problem leading to the addition of more useful hours in everyone's life.
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