There will be a traditional celebration in your country and you want to invite your friend from an English-speaking country. Write him/her a letter and invite your friend, explain what happens at the party, - describe the tradition and why it's important in your country, - say why it is important for your friend to be there.

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Dear Rohan, Hello ! I hope you and your family members are fine during

this

covid19 period. I am writing

this

letter to invite you

for

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our traditional celebration. As I remember you

was

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told me that you have

interest

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in Indian culture and you are doing

study

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a study

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for

this

subject.

Moreover

, we will

celebrated

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my big brother's wedding on 25th November . There are many

ceremony

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celebrated

such

as on 21st November "mehndi" events and on 22 November

garba

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night and we will wear our traditional dresses on

this

day.

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, on

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wedding

day

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we will dance on my

brother

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vargodo .it's

very

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interesting celebration and

also

teach our costumes that you

also

enjoy

this events

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and it's very useful for

study presentations.

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, you will

also

come

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one week in advance so we will go to my hometown. I hope you enjoy

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celebration. I

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meet see you soon Warm wishes, Rahi

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secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
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7Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

159 words

6.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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