There will be a traditional celebration in your country and you want to invite your friend from an English-speaking country. Write him/her a letter and invite your friend, explain what happens at the party, - describe the tradition and why it's important in your country, - say why it is important for your friend to be there.

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Dear Rohan, Hello ! I hope you and your family members are fine during

this

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covid19 period. I am writing

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letter to invite you

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our traditional celebration. As I remember you

was

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told me that you have

interest

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in Indian culture and you are doing

study

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a study

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for

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subject.

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celebrated

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my big brother's wedding on 25th November . There are many

ceremony

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celebrated

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as on 21st November "mehndi" events and on 22 November

garba

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night and we will wear our traditional dresses on

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day.

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, on

final

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wedding

day

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we will dance on my

brother

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brother's

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vargodo .it's

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a very

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interesting celebration and

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teach our costumes that you

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enjoy

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this events

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and it's very useful for

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study presentations.

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come

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one week in advance so we will go to my hometown. I hope you enjoy

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celebration. I

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meet see you soon Warm wishes, Rahi

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

159 words

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