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Most people would agree that Generation X, people bom between 1997 and 2007, are more dishonnest than previout generation .Why is this? is this positive or negative development for society.

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There is a belief that
people
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 who were born from 1997 to 2007 are more likely to be dishonest compared to the previous years. From the writer's perspective, the reason for dishonesty is the lack of responsibility for the
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. In light of
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,
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 is a negative development for society
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 the bad effects that these
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 have. It must be understood that being irresponsible is a common trend in teenagers' lives recently
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 procrastination.
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, there is a large number of young
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 who do not put effort into the
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 because of distractions,
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, their
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 can not be finished on time and they make an excuse for
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. When it comes to deadlines they do not take responsibility for their fault for not finishing the
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, they just blame outside reasons
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 as the time of their family.
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, young
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 start to get used to telling lies in order to hide their mistakes.
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 trend is seen to have a bad effect on the growth of social life. To explain
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, being dishonest in studying or working can make young
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 seen as unreliable and can miss the opportunities to go
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 in their
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. With a community where every individual is telling lies
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 will affect a lot on the development of the economy
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 these irresponsible workers. Take the students in Vietnam as an example where most of them tell lies to the teacher,
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, these lies have negative effects and procrastinate the whole lesson
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 make the teacher not believe these liars anymore. In conclusion, there is a negative trend of the late 1900s and first 2000s
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 telling lies these days
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 irresponsibility.
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 situation is said to have a bad impact on modern society because of unreliable individuals which leads to a decrease in the economy.

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task achievement
Ensure that your introduction clearly presents the topic and your viewpoint. It seems that the birth years for Generation X were mistakenly referred to as 1997 to 2007 instead of the correct span (roughly the early 1960s to late 1970s). Clarifying terms and correcting factual inaccuracies will strengthen your task response.
task achievement
Develop your main ideas more fully with specific, clear examples. While you mention the general issue of dishonesty among younger generations and its consequences, more concrete examples or data supporting your claims would enhance your essay's persuasiveness and relevance.
coherence cohesion
Maintain logical organization throughout your essay. While you’ve established a basic structure, there’s room for making transitions between paragraphs smoother. This can be achieved through clearer topic sentences that relate directly back to the thesis and better linkage words or phrases.
task achievement
Be cautious with generalizations. Your essay occasionally makes broad statements about young people and society without sufficient evidence. Balancing your arguments with acknowledgments of exceptions or variations within generations could make your essay more nuanced and convincing.

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